Why?

OK, you have your poem, the message is clear and you have stuck to a structure. Now you need to clean up the presentation, especially if you have aspirations of a book.

Firstly, you must use proper punctuation. When you're asking a question use a question mark, when you pause like you would in a normal sentence use a comma. You get the idea. Capitalise I every time, it is very untidy when you have a few i's and just as many I's it doesn't take even a second to use the shift key, get in the habit now and you'll be better off down the road.

Secondly a poem's standard format is to capitalise the first word of every line, so make sure you do so before submitting here, as I said earlier, it's all about habit.

The title is hopeless romantic and yet there is no mention of it in the body. This is slightly surprising and you may want to address it because the poem you have written lends itself to a mainstream Hallmark audience (that is far from an insult) and poem titles are generally expected to be in there as it reflects what they want to say.

The reality of this poem is that it isn't going to win any prizes, but it could sell easily. The only reason it won't win any prizes is because it contains too many I's.

If this is your first poem, it's a bloody good start.

Bret

i love this poem.

I Really Really Liked your Poem..It Really Show Your Feelings
Keep Going
xox

Very good.

This is really true.. alot of ppl act this way. and worry n stuff. good write.. keep it up.

Love Alwayz,
Katie Schettler