Wait

by Austin   Jun 27, 2005


Flying faster than before
The waves are picking up
Waiting and needing you more
More than ever before
And sitting here to see you again
While the waves crash down
The sky turns the deep blue
The colour you once loved
And now these minutes fade away
But I can't hold you here anymore
So the glow from the stars
Lulls me to sleep on the sand
And I drowned in the puddle
of tears I make in the sand

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  • 18 years ago

    by cowgirlstar26

    its an ok poem I think it would be alot better if you didnt repeat the same words like before and sand, it would be alot better if u used different wording but i liked it
    keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by Cory Mastrandrea

    Guilt was better. If you are going to write a good love poem, try and get into the psychology of one of the characters in the poem. This is not as good as Guilt. It sounds even more generic. IT sounded like the driving force behind the poem were words and how they sounded. I always tell people what makes a poem good is not nessecarily the rhymes and the words, cause they can always be changed and fixed later on, but the creative inspiration and idea behind the poem.

  • 18 years ago

    by mistressxsork

    I liked this one. It had a nice emotional touch towards it.

  • 18 years ago

    by Marjan

    I liked this one. keep it up.

  • 18 years ago

    by Lecrissa

    I gave this a 4. Flow could be better.
    But then what do I know. You did good

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