Death's Voice

by midnight♥lullibys   Jul 6, 2005


What are you doing,
you look lost
and lonely

why are you still here?
no one loves you
you have no purpose, deary

why do you still stand
there holding that knife
shaking, quivering with fear

what keeps you living
what keeps you
thriving

whats holding you back
is it he
the one whose presence
you lack

just do it
let go
give up

don\'t throw a fit
or put up a show
just give up

you know you want it.
your death.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Robert

    I think I commented on this before, It was good alot more clearer, but I think if you would have made death talk to her it would hold more power to it but all and all nice attempt...

  • 18 years ago

    by Brookeღ

    I like your style! You have a style all your own! Dark and deep! Once again another well written poem! ~Brooke~

  • 18 years ago

    by Robert

    This would have been better if you made the person talking to you was infact death but still a good start keep writing...

  • 18 years ago

    by Britney

    Very different! But i really liked it.. the way you layed it out as a poem was also unique..keep up the great work

  • 18 years ago

    by NannO

    gr8 poem.. new of the sort.. never read a poem that told the truth of dark voice lyk that..lyk its not beatin round the bush n all.. its unique.. i lovd the rhyme.. and dark is one of my fav categories.. u gave ur words lyf.. thumbs up 4 that
    keep up the talent
    nouna

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