It's never good enough.

by mandieD   Aug 9, 2005


The thunder roars at me from the heavens. i hear her booming voice.
the rain pitter patters on my forehead. as i stare into her eyes of ice.
the sky has split apart for me to reach a sapping cloud.
i would present my prize to you but i know you'd be too proud.
your face as i present to you the sun the stars the moon,
is indulgent, disappointed, and then you leave the room.
i free the cloud that i have caught and it floats back up and up.
I'm left feeling i am wrong and nowhere near good enough.
why do you constantly make me cry and make me feel so blue?
because the truth of the matter is, I'm really too good for you!

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  • 18 years ago

    by Lecrissa

    The best poetry comes from pure emotion. And this poem has it. Keep up the good work.

  • 18 years ago

    by Tiny Reader

    I would present my prize to you but i know you'd be too proud
    That's my favourite line, but really the whole poem is great! I have no criticism :)

  • 18 years ago

    by Truest Lies

    Just slightly arrogant that poem, but if someone wouldn't accept a cloud that someone else had pulled down from the stormy heavens, then yes, they clearly are not good enough for the person who managed to pull down the cloud in the first place!

    Good Writing!
    beth

  • 18 years ago

    by NannO

    hehe.. i lykd this one.. ur poems are sorta different to those ive read.. i dunno how, but its all gud.. :D.. i yk ur use of words and rhyme and the way u noe how to say wat u wanna say
    keep it up
    nouna

  • 18 years ago

    by Patrik

    Liked this one too, but should be devided in to more lines, kinda feels like reading an essey:p

    Best wishes,
    Patrik

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