Again

Another great one... keep it up.. i can only hope that i can be as good one day..
take care
amanda

This was a unique write. I must agree the flow was a little awkword, but all together the poem was excellent

I loved how this went together

"Nobody is looking?
How can every single person
be so oblivious and self-focused?"

good rhyme on that one:)

anyways take care

The flow was a bit rough and it seemed like thoughts were somewhat scattered instead of collected....4/5 nice job....thanks for the comments on my poems....luv yas mwah

-kayla-

The structure of this poem carried your questions and the meaning well in this poem, you got to the point well and were not restricted by rhyme which was good, the flow was fine and I wasn't disrupted at all whilst reading, Its a shame you feel so bad, so many people do, hopefully things will get better though..

take care
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Very well written ..like the style of the poem..great job..5/5