Lost hope*

by midnight♥lullibys   Sep 15, 2005


Slamming doors
Screaming threats
Shake the floor
continuous fights

Why won't this just end
The hate and the anger
We seem to always tend
To make these feelings stronger

Why do you hit
Cant you see I'm crying
Putting up a fit
Because i am hurting?

Just please tell me why
You don't want me happy
Don't you notice how hard i try?
Why can/t you just see?

That I'm watching what i say
As to not anger you
But your hate builds day by day
No matter what i do..

So should i just give in
To the life I've been living
My hope for us is running thin
How long will this end up lasting?...

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  • 18 years ago

    by xDryTearsx

    Aw this is sad but really good.

  • 18 years ago

    by ShadowDancer

    Nice job! it was a very heartfelt poem. i can realte to it more then i care to. the flow was good, and it spoke to the reader. lovely.

    Ruby

  • 18 years ago

    by Hannah Mureen

    Hey
    great poem... the ryhming was a bit forced, but it happens to the best of us. good job anyways...
    hannah

  • 18 years ago

    by Atomic

    I think you could have done much better, so I gave you a 4/5.

    Again, it wasn't as detailed as your other works.

    However, I still enjoyed it. =)

    ( )_( )
    (='.'=)
    (")-(") Arrivederci!

  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    Okay yeah the rhyme scheme was terrible you were off in many points but i think you know that the flow was somewhat awkward but i did enjoy the story behind all the formatting stuff i think this is a very meaningful peace to you and i think this is you speaking from experience i could be wrong but it just seems like your really writing how you feel and thats wonderful

    5/5

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