The Most Perfect Scene

by Dark Kitten   Sep 22, 2005


I wish I had a normal life,
One initiated with loving tender care,
Two parents gathered in one large house,
Who would talk together without a glare,

I would sit at the table and watch them,
Smile as they laugh and play,
Like little children untouched by the world,
And I would be just as happy every day,

My brother and sister would live with us,
We would be one big happy family,
Living life, like we should, without a care,
Because life is good as long as we are happy,

We would play and laugh and sing silly songs,
Unfathomed by the unusually cruel inhabitants of Earth,
Because peace was the only things on our minds,
And not a soul hated us or dragged our good mood into the hearth,

As a family of one we would not need anyone else,
Because our chores would be equally spread out,
The love of each other would be all we needed,
All our pain and disorder we would live without,

Each night we would sit at a table for five,
Not the usual two struggling to talk about something,
Our conversations would be clear and comfortable,
And the words of my dad would be nice and not sting,

At morning we would have breakfast as a normal routine,
Sit down at the table that was made for five,
Eating eggs and potatoes and the bacon that we all loved,
Because life was so good when we had love to survive,

School would be a lot more fun,
Without all the people who hated us and glared down at the uncool,
Our classmates would respect me and my family,
Because no one was mean, at least not at my school,

We were head of our classes,
Made all the good grades,
Our parents were proud of us,
And the love never did fade,

And every day was just as good as the rest,
My family was happy and so was I,
A fantasy that I wish was so very true,
But I was only dealt a slice of life's pie,

((This poem was not supposed to be written very well in it's form. Mostly because I wanted the form to kind of show that everything can not be as perfect as you want it to be. Life is a huge mess of emotions, words, mistakes, and differences. I am surprised to find that hardly anyone saw that hidden meaning in there.))

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  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    The last line - great imagery! Though a very sad meaning, so I shouldn't get too exited - oh, what the heck!! Amazing poem! I loved it so much, the rhymes came off a little at points, out and without sounds a bit wrong - but it was so lovely and easy to read - so sad and . . .and . . . and . . . I'm speechless!!

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by Atomic

    Hmmm...the imagery of the perfec scen was ...well....perfect.

    "And every day was just as good as the rest,
    My family was happy and so was I,
    A fantasy that I wish was so very true,
    But I was only dealt a slice of life's pie,"

    This was my favourite stanza, but I especially heart the last line.=)

    ( )_( )
    (='.'=)
    (")-(") Arrivederci!

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    This is a very "different" poem; I liked the subject and how you set the poem out like a story. Only problem I feel with this is the same as before, you repeat yourself and you don't need to. Also because the lines are quite lengthy, you need to make sure the flow stays constant. It was good for the most of it, but in places, it let you down. Apart from that, though it was written quite well. You use vocabulary nicely too, so that really helps strengthen the poem.

    Ok I’ll explain the meaning of my poem now. As you may have guessed my poetry is rarely straightforward. The poem is about depression in general. It’s about the feeling that you’re falling (in life) and asking for help but no one seems to understand. The “flying pigs” is there to change the subject of the poem, just as people do when the person in the poem asks for help. The reference to “having no reflection” means they might as well be invisible because no one cares. Maybe if you re read it keeping this in mind it may make more sense. Thanks for the comment.

  • 18 years ago

    by nikki

    Great poem i loved it 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by shawn hoskins

    Very good and emotional good job 5/5