TaKiNg ThE KiLlS

by Jeremy   Oct 7, 2005


The ocean stops and not a sound
The suns rays are like a perfect crown
it's like looking at myself as a piece of work
feeling maybe i should hide and lerk
stop and think all i forgave
no one cared and all started to walk
noing that they all where going to talk
pounding myself out of this hole
and maybe i will find my spirt and soul
nor walking up mountains or climbing down hills
there is someone
that will take the kills

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  • 18 years ago

    by Macy

    Great poem

  • 18 years ago

    by Emma

    Wow i just read ur poem it is really good...i wish mine were as good as urs...check mine out i wanna know what you think of it...does it suck bad i only have one...its called missing you...please comment i need someone to tell me if i suck lol well ur really good at writing poems!

  • 18 years ago

    by facedownindirt

    JEREMY!!! aaahhhh!!! i love this kid everyone! he rocks my flipping world! but yeah jeremy... i love this poem sooo much... you are seriously a natural!!! i'm putting this poem on my wall sometime and then maybe sometime you can come over and see it... lol oh and jeremy... thank you so much for your shout out!! yay i'm ganna do that too!! whoop whoop!!
    love you sooo much sweetie... your the bestest friend ever!!

    *.:morgan:.*

  • 18 years ago

    by Marjan

    That was great jeremy.
    I enjoyed reading it specially the beginning was very good.
    good choice of words.
    take care,
    marjan

  • 18 years ago

    by ~â‚£ading |nspiration~

    Noing that they all where going to talk
    Correct this sentence please...thanks...

    And hey, glad your friend get you into this...you are so good...can't wait to see more from you...

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