Forlorn Hope

Again, spectacular, emotional poem. Again, the flow is beautiful and the rhythm is great.
Keep it up!

Saiya

Beautiful again! This is very easy to read as the rhymes seem to come naturally to you which is a talent. I love your work.

Pretty good, you can improve by using "I" less. Here's my version

I sit and wonder, sit and think
And into depression i further sink
don't know anything, nothing at all
Not even how to avert my own fall

cannot help those for whom i care
no one whom feelings i can share
Life seems pointless, dull and drab
As each chance slips by, I vainly grab

Each day it gets harder just to wake
And these feelings i cannot shake
finding it harder to draw a breath
As inside i wish for death

Though I don't believe it not at all
Its all i have, though its small
It'll get better, if my time I bide
This forlorn hope that resides inside

Beautiful & touched me deep
very well written
i cant understand why ppl undervote poems like these... it should be 5 not 4.7
well

Each day it gets harder just to wake
And these feelings i cannot shake
I find it hard to draw a breath
As inside i wish for death

is beautiful !
loved reading this
love
amy

Each day it gets harder just to wake
And these feelings i cannot shake
I think you should reword these, they seem to weaken the rest of the poem.
Also, you use the word 'whom' too often. Try finding alternet words.

Though I don't believe it not at all
Its all i have, though its small
It'll get better, if my time I bide
This forlorn hope that resides inside

hmm, this part needs a little work.
Try placing a comma before 'not at all' and after 'bide'.
when you write, 'Its all i have, though its small', I think it would flow better if you wrote something like, 'It's all I have, though it's rather small'.
not bad altogether, it made good sense and was entertaning, 4/5