Spider Venom

by Jamie   Oct 17, 2005


I would realllllly like title suggesstion for this!!!!!

***this is kinda a weird but oh well...this is about bullies so with that in mind it should make sense***

Her eyes emanated spiders
They crawled upon her soul
Locked her heart in cobwebs
Never to give back what they stole

Deeply sunken fangs
She strained to dislocate
But venom diluted strength
Began to meticulously sedate

Razor legs spilt open flesh
Dug deep into her heart
Dyed the blood trail black
Slowly they tore her apart

Wove massive spider webs
Caught and dissected every fly
Her tears could not erase
Her desperate wishes to die

She didnt need her own poison
Although death was desirous
They would do the deed
Already injected the virus

Saliva mixed with antagonism
They drowned her in their spit
Dismantled her soul with disfavor
Each word created another slit

Their beings symbolized torment
Quickly they did procreate
Accentuated all her insecurities
As they continued to contaminate

Poison drenched their teeth
That sunk into her pride
Strung her on her defects
And spun another suicide

**so i really liked this when i wrote it but now after reading over it a few times i realize the flow is very very choppy so try to disregaurd that lol***

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  • 18 years ago

    by Tiny Reader

    Again your use of imagery is very effective and your style is unique. very imaginative. I love your writing.

  • 18 years ago

    by HansRik

    Ay ay ay, this was truly an excellent poem! The diction was so captivating and the structure so precise! The title is appropriate to the poem, but still a bit vague (maybe mention putrefaction or something that comes from within.) This poem is nevertheless incredibly written and is truly a work of art. The imagery is grotesque and very unique. I liked it a lot. Well done.

  • 18 years ago

    by ScarletHaze

    Omg this was yet another brilliant poem! i wish i could write half as well as you! well keep it up and take care xox

  • 18 years ago

    by Ixora

    Wow amazing poems and such vivid words. keep it up and thank u for ur comment. i wrote some poems but i wont be able to post them for a while; parent s hit u know...anyway keep it up ur great

  • 18 years ago

    by Shy

    Wow this is a great poem. the title is perfect just the way it is.
    Shy