Vendetta

by Tiny Reader   Oct 19, 2005


Slashing, dicing away at the seams
Sadistically throwing you in between.
Angry and violent, making you scream.
Alone but not frightened, this is my dream.

Chasing, crusading everyone away
Cheating and leading everyone astray.
Fighting the exhaustion of all this hate
Pleading insanity will resurrect my fate.

Scratching and torturing those around me
At least this way they learn just to let me be
Cursing life's restrictions stopping me be free
My vendetta causes the worlds' garden to fall into debris.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    I agree, this was a difficult rhyme scheme to play with. But you did a great job with this one. Very detailed images. Creative. Also, very powerful words.

  • 17 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "My vendetta causes worlds garden to fall into debris. " seems like you ran into trouble with too many syllables in this line, since you left out a 'the' that would have made the line sound a bit better. I think it should either be world's or worlds', depending on your meaning, but I'm pretty sure there should be an apostrophe.

    Considering the difficult rhyme scheme, I'm impressed by how strong the message is in the poem. I liked the use of interesting words... I just read 3 poems from a different poet that wasn't much more than
    "I am so sad
    you hurt me real bad
    I'm sad."

    So this was a welcome change.

  • 18 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    I loved this poem! There was a lot of emotion in it. It was sad yet beautiful! I think this is one of my favorite poems you've written. Very good!
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Syn

    Very nice work.. no criticism here.
    ~David

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