Suicide took him

Once agian I would get rid of the comas and periods. I dont see much use for them. Other than that I really liked reading. You poems are all well put together.

Not your best, but good none the less....
i sure wish i could go where he is *sigh*

Wow that was great. I think I liked the first two lines the best out of the poem though. You have a lot of talent so keep up the good work. *5/5*

Amazing job and i'm so sorry about Jake. I really wished everyone would think about what they do before they do it. I mean it's pretty scary knowing everyone like brokenmisery said that around the world which is about 18 seconds or whatever take there lives. I mean i was one of those people thinking about it. But i realized it was stupid i mean my mom helped me out a little bit but she didn't know i was cutting and one night she told me she loved me and i almost started crying because she never said that before i mean yeah when i was a little kid but not now and i realized it was stupid and now i have my down time thinking of cutting but i don't do it because it's stupid and i'm actually happy about life now but this poem i really hope makes people think that one person can go and look what happens and maybe they can re think it over before they do anything stupid again. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

Suicide is one of the saddest things, even to those who have tried themselves and seen others whom have done it. It hurts to feel the guilt we could of helped it hurts that someone else suffered so much they did that, but someone around the world suicides every 40 seconds. A good poem. One line to fix is "to steel away his sole", i think you meant "to steal away his soul". Keep writing, its a great form of communication from your soul and makes life a little less painful.
luv Broken.