God's Design

by Void   Dec 11, 2005


There he lay with spirit half broken,
His first love tore his heart open.
There she sits with no light in her eyes,
She's been abused to long, she's hurt and she cries.
In a corner they huddle as close as they can,
Frightened by parents, who aren't afraid to be too mad.
All I see around me, right here, right now,
Is hatred that dwells,as we stand back and allow.
Here we watch as people fall apart,
Not doing anything- but it's time we start.
If society worked together, peace could be found,
The heaven we could create would have love profound.
This world was once gods design,
But our hatred devoured loves devine.

There's a baby that cries in the dead of night,
His parents were killed by a red city light.
The young driver in the other car had been drinking,
Cruised through the streets without ever thinking.
On the other end of town, a stranger pulls a gun.
Not for revenge, just for a nice hit and run.
A drug dealer is unhappy with no money paid.
An air craft hits a building, and only rubble remains.
All I see around me, right here, right now,
Is hatred that dwells,as we stand back and allow.
Here we watch as people fall apart,
Not doing anything- but it's time we start.
If society worked together, peace could be found,
The heaven we could create would have love profound.
This world was once gods design,
But our hatred devoured loves devine.

This was written to point out that there is alot of hatred in the world, and everything we do has consiquences... I did mention an accident rather than an act of hate, and if you noticed what I'm talking about can you please tell me what you think of it - should it be included in this poem? Is it not needed? Please leave all comments, good or bad, I love constructive criticism and would appreciate that alot.

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  • 18 years ago

    by ~*~MoNiQuE~*~

    Is it the aircraft crashing part that is an accident and not an act of hate? well it doesnt matta coz it still brings forth the same sad feeling that u r attempting to convey throughout the whole poem! i say, well done and keep up the fantastic work!

  • 18 years ago

    by Lady Vengeance

    Spectacular! i liked it a lot. i'm sorry i finished early, but i guess ur glad coz u won : ) lol
    rock on, Suzie

  • 18 years ago

    by LovinMyLife

    I think this poem is awesome. It looks like you put a lot of time into it. Awesome job! I love it! keep it up!
    ~SMILES~

  • 18 years ago

    by Ariana

    I think this is good, its very descriptive and your ideas are explained well. It's also written very straightforwardly (I just invented a word) which is good because this is quite long, so being able to get a decent understanding of it in the first reading it helpful. Nice piece.

  • 18 years ago

    by Justin

    Whoa.... I still have nothing negative to say about your poetry, this is just another fine example of your ability to write, you have an amazing gift, you seem to express yourself through your poems so easily, and thats something not alot of people can due, your exactly right, there is alot of hatred in this word, and there is consequences to face, you summed (sp?) it all up beautifully, Amazing job, 5/5

    My favorite lines were...
    "If society worked together, peace could be found,
    The heaven we could create would have love profound."

    Very creative and inspirational.