I really really like this poem it has heaps of emotion u should write more i wish iw as as gud as you lol 5/5

I think that you should write more than on poem, i think that you are talented!

Thats such a sweet and loving poem... It really shows whats now important to you! I can't wait to read more of your work :) 5/5

That was great you should write more you have good talent and it feels like you write from the heart

Great poem. Well expressed... We all make mistakes. Try not to feel so guilty upon yourself... maybe you were just overwhelmed at the time and couldn't help. Everyone makes mistakes... anyway, if you need anyone to listen, I'm here for you.

Michelle

Wow I really enjoyed this poem. It really captured the pain of this person, the regret that life brought upon him, because of the person he decided to be. I could feel his pain while reading this poem, you described it that well. You picked an emotion that we have all felt from one point or another in our lives and your brought it to live through the story of the guy. Your poem also came to a point and wasn't just a stand of complaints which also added to it becoming a great read! Nice work! I really loved the last few lines:

I wish I was given another chance with my son,
I wish for an eternal sunset with my wife.
I wish I hadn't spent years wishing so much,
Maybe... I was wishing away my life

Great write! Keep up writing!

-Tainted Mikochan

Wow i loved it great job atomic!!!

I wish I can travel way back in time,
To undo what my past had done.

So many people wish they could go back and fix there mistakes, I so badly wish I could fix mine, Like everyone else I have to live with mine to!

I your poem was just so wonderful with a very strong meaning behind it. This was something that truely came from your feelings and I can feel it when I read it. You did a wonderful job on it!

Keep up the good work! and I hopes will get better!

-Josiah
VolunteerWorker for FR&C

Great work ! very heartfelt poem... deep & filled with emotion !
loved it !!
pls check my poem
"murder or suicide"
would be gr8
let me know if u write more i'll be happy to read em
love
amy

Wow this was so good. it had so much emotion and was very well written.. keep up the good work hun!

sammie

This is such a magificent piece.. mind blowing even. I love it.

Great poem. We all do things in life we regret but I look at it like..if I didnt make those mistakes than I wouldnt be where I am now. Keep your head up high and I think things will turn out for the best in time. Keep up the great work though your good at exressing your emotions.

~Juls~

I think the last stanza is good.. but i think the last line needs work.. other then that..good.

~David

This was really good too! I loved the last line "Maybe...I was wishing away my life"
Such a great poem full of emotions.Well done! 5/5

luv natalie x-x

Great poem, absolutely great. I really envy how you know you`ve made mistakes and that you`re willing to fix them. I`m sort of interested in hearing more to this story, which can only mean that this poem was absolutely breathtaking. More like heartrending, actually. But i loved it. 5/5, NO doubt.

Reminds me of my father..