This Girl who Looked Up to Me

by LadyPearl   Feb 20, 2006


Freestyle: no rhymes
Based on me
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Brown curly hair eclipse her soft face
Innocent and cheerful in many different ways
She heard my music, my flowing tunes
And saw her reflection within my soul

I saw her smiling as I walked down the stage
A radiant glint hidden in her eyes
I saw my mirror image upon her expression
She wanted to be, one day, me...

Oh little girl, it gives me pleasure
To know I inspire your motivation
But behind the glory of my music
I'm someone I myself resent
You can play, you can practice
You can sing and be like me
But in the shadows I'm not the same
I'm someone in which you will fear
Cuz my life isn't all in limelight

I'll keep quiet about the darkness
You're too young to understand
Work your way to be like me
But one day you will realize
Not everything is fun-and-games
When the world, one day, turns around
Taking back the innocence you had
And all your dreams will fade like me

But hush, I'll be silent about this
It's not the time for you to know
Have your carefree, funfilled life
And forget the shadows in which still hides

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  • 18 years ago

    by J Lau

    Love it! Great write! If I may suggest... to add more punch and impact to the prelude of the latter part of the poem, try breaking this line up "I'm someone I myself resent" into serveral lines like this...

    I'm someone,
    I, myself
    Resent.

    Then start off "You can play..." in the next stanze to emphasize on the hidden reality. Of course, that's my own opinion. Great write though... keep writing. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by NannO

    Wow.. this is amazing.. i absolutely love every single word in this.. im sorry u feel this way.. but ur ryt about it.. someone is always hiding some deep truth about themselves.. ur title is also captivating, but i think "The Girl.." cud work more with the topic of ur poem than "This Girl".. gr8 job..
    ur gr8..
    take care
    NannO

  • 18 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    Yea I love this poem, its really good.

  • 18 years ago

    by Loulou

    This is good for a no ryhming poem great job hun

  • 18 years ago

    by Allison

    That was awsome. I loved it. Keep up the good work. *5/5*