Just the way I feel !!!

Hey there,
....i have no words right now... this was incredible.. wel... i got a new poem and i hope you would check it out, its called, "Cause of Death: Rape (Part I). Again, great piece of writing, i love reading ur stuff.
Monique

Second stanza: And try to keep myself war*m*.....
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You have brought tears to my eyes here....

Do keep warm...keep trying....!!!!!

Aww babe i l0ve it, i totally no how u feel, plz babe i l0ve u nd i only want u 2 b happy!! it breaks my heart 2 c u unhappy luv ur bestiie

Awesome.......excellent....
ur every word seems to carry pain in itself ...its so sad and touching..5/5

keep writing dear!
Bharti

Wow, perfectly written, perfect choice of words just amazing....I loved this one hunni. I know that some times the pain you feel can be too much to bare, but then you have to be strong and whenever you feel like this you can always email me sweety, I will be here for you. Hope you are feeling better???

Love ya girl

Heh, well, I liked this.
It's rhymes are awesome, and the flow is great most of the time, but I think I found two stanza's where the third line is out of the flow

It engages in a precious fight,
The one with my heart.
As memories and pain are re-enacted,
It helplessly falls apart.

That ^ I think the third line is too long, it broke out of the flow.

It's battling with my body now,
And this looks and feels wrong.
Self-loathing my scarred, curved body,
As this utter pain goes on.

Once again, I think the third line is too long.

Anyways, the imagery in this is great.

Good job, keep up the good work.

Hey love, ha this poem made me tear and that doesn't happen too often. We all have our battles with the past, those of us who have a past we don't want to remember. Keep fighting. You have a strong, beautiful soul and you are strong enough to get over this.

It duels with my soul now,
Enforcing all the guilt and regret.
As I fall with such emptiness,
Those things I tried to forget.

*these lines really got to me*

The pain my be burning, and may seem to consume your soul, but I can promise that it will not last forever. Hugs love, a billion and then several more. Best of luck to you, hunny. I know you can pull through.

-Tainted Mikochan

I loved the bit about re-enacting memories, because that is so what happens. Why can't we ever remeebr the good ones as well eh?

=D

Lots of love n hugs. xxx

Good job on the lyrics...oh...not a song?? hmm should be... play an instrument? Music adds demension and clarity to your words..try it sometime...who knows.. someone may just want to listen.

Great poem, i love how you make ur past seem like a demon, it's awsome, keep writting. But im hoping ur not doing any more self-destructive behaviors

Eerily reminiscent of feelings I would really rather have not experienced.... brilliant nonetheless. You have captured the essence of the dark times.

Cheers, Krystle

PS -- I would appreciate if you gave some of my work a quick read, thanks. :)

THIS IS JUST AN AMAZING POEM...AMAZING..AMAZING...AMAZING

really loved every word of it...too dark and too sad and then so touchy...wow!!

all the best and take care

WOW...Im speachless but yet Im still trying to say something.... Words cannot describe how good this poem was. I mean it was SOOOOOOO good. Wow you got the rhymes...have u thought about song writing....I would so tune in if u did. KEEP WRITING! u are soooo good at it. HAPPY WRITING> *so long*

Great poem!

Oh wow, this poem of yours left me speechless. Incredible work, thats all I can say.

Loved the way you rhymed everything and it was just awesome! Keep it up!

Oh i like your poem it is sooooo good!xoxoxsarahxoxox

Good job on this peom i loved it

Aww i missed your poetry so much hun! aww, im back to this site for good now hopefully lol, aw i missed reading all your work, cannot wait to get to reading some more, this poem is fantastic though woow, amazing hun, xxoo