Comments : Torments Me

  • 18 years ago

    by Jewish Cupcake

    Just the way I feel !!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Monique

    Hey there,
    ....i have no words right now... this was incredible.. wel... i got a new poem and i hope you would check it out, its called, "Cause of Death: Rape (Part I). Again, great piece of writing, i love reading ur stuff.
    Monique

  • 18 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Second stanza: And try to keep myself war*m*.....
    **********************************************
    You have brought tears to my eyes here....

    Do keep warm...keep trying....!!!!!

  • Aww babe i l0ve it, i totally no how u feel, plz babe i l0ve u nd i only want u 2 b happy!! it breaks my heart 2 c u unhappy luv ur bestiie

  • 18 years ago

    by PURE HEART

    Awesome.......excellent....
    ur every word seems to carry pain in itself ...its so sad and touching..5/5

    keep writing dear!
    Bharti

  • 18 years ago

    by BleedingAngel

    Wow, perfectly written, perfect choice of words just amazing....I loved this one hunni. I know that some times the pain you feel can be too much to bare, but then you have to be strong and whenever you feel like this you can always email me sweety, I will be here for you. Hope you are feeling better???

    Love ya girl

  • 18 years ago

    by The Wingless

    Heh, well, I liked this.
    It's rhymes are awesome, and the flow is great most of the time, but I think I found two stanza's where the third line is out of the flow

    It engages in a precious fight,
    The one with my heart.
    As memories and pain are re-enacted,
    It helplessly falls apart.

    That ^ I think the third line is too long, it broke out of the flow.

    It's battling with my body now,
    And this looks and feels wrong.
    Self-loathing my scarred, curved body,
    As this utter pain goes on.

    Once again, I think the third line is too long.

    Anyways, the imagery in this is great.

    Good job, keep up the good work.

  • 18 years ago

    by Once an Angel

    Hey love, ha this poem made me tear and that doesn't happen too often. We all have our battles with the past, those of us who have a past we don't want to remember. Keep fighting. You have a strong, beautiful soul and you are strong enough to get over this.

    It duels with my soul now,
    Enforcing all the guilt and regret.
    As I fall with such emptiness,
    Those things I tried to forget.

    *these lines really got to me*

    The pain my be burning, and may seem to consume your soul, but I can promise that it will not last forever. Hugs love, a billion and then several more. Best of luck to you, hunny. I know you can pull through.

    -Tainted Mikochan

  • 18 years ago

    by Avellana

    I loved the bit about re-enacting memories, because that is so what happens. Why can't we ever remeebr the good ones as well eh?

    =D

    Lots of love n hugs. xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by MaryAnnEvans

    Good job on the lyrics...oh...not a song?? hmm should be... play an instrument? Music adds demension and clarity to your words..try it sometime...who knows.. someone may just want to listen.

  • 18 years ago

    by RegretedPast

    Great poem, i love how you make ur past seem like a demon, it's awsome, keep writting. But im hoping ur not doing any more self-destructive behaviors

  • 18 years ago

    by Krystle

    Eerily reminiscent of feelings I would really rather have not experienced.... brilliant nonetheless. You have captured the essence of the dark times.

    Cheers, Krystle

    PS -- I would appreciate if you gave some of my work a quick read, thanks. :)

  • 18 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    THIS IS JUST AN AMAZING POEM...AMAZING..AMAZING...AMAZING

    really loved every word of it...too dark and too sad and then so touchy...wow!!

    all the best and take care

  • 18 years ago

    by ~*Layna*~

    WOW...Im speachless but yet Im still trying to say something.... Words cannot describe how good this poem was. I mean it was SOOOOOOO good. Wow you got the rhymes...have u thought about song writing....I would so tune in if u did. KEEP WRITING! u are soooo good at it. HAPPY WRITING> *so long*

  • 18 years ago

    by Violet

    Great poem!

  • 18 years ago

    by Princess Love

    Oh wow, this poem of yours left me speechless. Incredible work, thats all I can say.

  • 18 years ago

    by xXxDarkDreamerxXx

    Loved the way you rhymed everything and it was just awesome! Keep it up!

  • 18 years ago

    by Sarah

    Oh i like your poem it is sooooo good!xoxoxsarahxoxox

  • 18 years ago

    by sweet girl!

    Good job on this peom i loved it

  • 18 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    Aww i missed your poetry so much hun! aww, im back to this site for good now hopefully lol, aw i missed reading all your work, cannot wait to get to reading some more, this poem is fantastic though woow, amazing hun, xxoo