Bullet

by Synh   Mar 17, 2006


He seems so unhappy
Something is on his mind
His life so miserable
Since the beginning of time

The world passes by hastily
Leaving him with father time
He's trying to catch up
Lest he fails and dies

He looks at me with such distance
Death is in his eyes
The life he once knew
Has met its demise

Sadness has become the home
His shelter from misery
His soul hidden from the world
Kept secret from all who seek to see

I have found his happiness
I can help his sorrow come to an end
It all begins with this gun
And ends with a bullet through my head

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  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wow.. that was so sad, yet so powerful! excellent work! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Aw wow hun, This was really sad. Yet such a great piece of work! It was really powerfully written. Awesome job! 5/5

    `natalie xx

  • 18 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Some real powerfull stuff her, nice work

  • 18 years ago

    by Stabbylou

    Wow that's so sad, the middle stanza really tore at my heart. It made me think of a friend I lost and that's what I saw in him, a growing distance, like he was already gone. Brilliant write again x

  • 18 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    It wasn't entirely good. Some problems with the flow. It had strong imagery yet the words didn't have that hook. Imagery was the most effective as was the emotions.
    ~S3I -Faith

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