Last Goodbye

by SERAbaby   Mar 28, 2006


They made you real upset,
And they hurt you deep inside
Now they don't understand
Why you chose suicide.

They made you feel unwanted,
Like you were never good enough
Now they're all in tears
Coz you didn't stay strong and tough.

They never even noticed,
The slashes on your wrist
Now they're all around your coffin
Saying how much you'll be missed.

They don't want to admit it,
It's their fault that your dead
Now they're saying goodbye
With a kiss on top of your head.

If only they had listened,
As least pretended to care
Now theres guilt and sorrow,
That they'll always have to bare.

Now they're saying sorry
But you know it's still a lie
With a tear, in your eye,
This is your last goodbye.

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Meh, this poem is kinda weird .. it was sort of just how I was feeling at the time, but i dunno.. I was gonna fix it but I was too lazy -_-"

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  • 18 years ago

    by *~[[Sheril]]~*

    Love ur poem...its so kewl

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaitlyn

    This is really good. I feel you could have explored the emotion deeper, but there is no doubt that this is terrific. it flowed really well and grabbed me in. great doll.

    Kat

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    Coz you didn't stay strong and tough.
    Maybe it would sound better without the coz.
    It could have been deeper. Make us feel the guilt :) But with the fact that you wrote "you" I think it's meant to make us feel we're in the characters place somewhat. The title was chosen well. The stanza mostly flowed decent. I just think you should try and tap into your writing talent and see what could come from that.

  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    Great write i thought it showed excellent emotion in it.... 5/5

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 18 years ago

    by PS

    I realy like this. its awesome. i could be a little deeper. really touch on the guilt that the people feel. but i like it the way it is too.

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