One day i will be gone

by Jacqui Armstrong   Apr 8, 2006


To try and change the way I am
To even try to think you can
To try and control what I do
Try just once and ill show you

You take control you push me out
You will loose me there is no doubt
One day in the future when I am gone
You may realize that you did wrong

That day will come I wont be here
I have told you enough it should be clear
When your old and you need care
You'll turn to me but I wont be there

Ill have a life all of my own
Ill have a family and wont be alone
I wont need you or your home
My hate for you will have grown

You let the alcohol take you over
Not for one night could you stay sober
You're loosing me I'm slipping away
Don't bother asking because I wont stay

Just remember why it was this way
Its gone to far you have no say
One day will be sooner than you think
And dad its all because YOUR drink.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Unamed

    Wow...so sad..and full of emotion...i totaly love the impact you put into the capitalized word in the last sentence. it was great!
    5/5
    ***aLy***

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Your first stanza?
    Very catchy.
    It seems almost like a nursery rhyme =P

    Dear, like I said, punctuation would turn this into art.

    And dad its all because YOUR drink.
    That doesn't really make sense.
    Do you mean to say
    It's because "you drink"
    Or "You're drunk"
    ?
    All in all.
    When I read the thing about the drinking.
    I thought it was kind of random at first.
    You didn't really lead up much to that.

    Hun, you choose the really good topics.
    Where on earth do you come up with these ideas? Lol.

  • 17 years ago

    by Marcus

    A little should be edited but this was a good poem.

    5/5

    Love,

    Marcus

    W00T W00T!

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    That is really good.. The flow and rhythm was really good and the rhyme scheme didn't seem at all forced. it's a very sad situation to be in and I'm sorry that you have to go through this. Keep it up and stay strong! :) 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Great poem! It was really sad but it had good emotion. The rhyme and flow were excelent. You are really talented! Great job!

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