DUDE this is romeo and juliet style haha i love it but dude so tragic...mine are too!!!! lol haha i love it keep writing dude but if you are the girl you better not kill yourself like that jeez that wouldnt be the smart thing to do lol
Omg dis is one hell of a awsum poem....i loved it so much espcially the end where the note sed " y did u make me lvoe u" n the bit wen he cut himself going"As I loved u more".....aww so sad....but awsum wwork, this deserves a 200/200...am i getting a lil carried away?...too bad haha i loved this sooo much....i got a poem writtien lyk this its called: open the door but the girl kills the bf lol...
adding u to ma favs!!:D...love dia mwaz xoxo
It was a tragic story. It's more like a short story than a poem. Anyway there are some unanswered question in your story. You need to explain things like why did that guy broke up with him even though he loves her. My suggestion: Before he dies you should have explained why the girl died.
Anyway it was a great story, good job.
Thanks for the comment on my poem.