It's Because...

by Mezmeryz   Apr 29, 2006


It's because I love you
And you don't know
How much you mean to me
We'll live it through
Let fate show
How loves suppose to be

It's because people may change
And feelings may change
But the love is always there
Things may seem strange
But I would never exchange
All for you that I had to bear

It's because you're unlike
The others I know
And I like you just that way
And you never strike
At the feelings I show
In my soul you've seem to lay

It's because of you
And the way you are
That seems to make me smile
For it is true
You're my little star
Making everything worthwhile

It's because I love you
And you don't know
How much you mean to me
We'll live it through
Let fate show
How loves suppose to be

*please rate or comment on the poem, it will be greatly appreciated and i will comment and rate back all round. Thank- you.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    It's because people may change
    And feelings may change
    ^^Double words. The two changes kind of takes away the impact. Plus you have this in the same stanza:
    But I would never exchange
    ^^Try reading that stanza out loud.
    That seems to make me smile
    ^^Seems a bit formal. Maybe just, 'That makes me smile.'
    Your poem is good but the flow feels a little off in places. It's a great friendship poem and all.
    p.s sorry for the late comment. Exams are a pain :p

  • 18 years ago

    by xBxRxOxKxExNx

    Awww its butiful hun x

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    I liked the complicated rhyme stucture of the poem - it worked really well with the concept. However:

    And way you are

    Should be

    And the way you are

    I also don't think that you should have put lil' in. It's a bit too informal for the rest of the poem, 'In my soul you've seem to lay' is a deep line, ad 'my lil' star' ruins this. All you need to do is change it to little to make the poem flow better, and sound more sohpisticated to go with the rhyme scheme better.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by Mezmeryz

    Well..of cors i want honest comments...so nething like critics dont effect me..ill try harder nxt time!:)
    xxx
    mezangel

  • 18 years ago

    by Nee

    I hv to say my honest comment! I gave it 4/5!
    the rhyme was kinda over andsecond stanza didn't hv to rhyme that way!!
    it was a good poem but comparing to the others...its not ur kind of the good work
    anyway keep it up and plz don't get mad at my honest comment (A)
    Luv Ya
    NemO XxXXxXxX