It broke my heart

by Bloomed Rose   May 9, 2006


I thought of you
as someone I could count on
my most trusted friend

Then you told me
We can't have friendship
Or your love with her would end

It broke my heart,
tore me down
As though I'd never heal

And you,
you were serious . . . .
But I just can't believe it's real

She used to be
my best friend also
but then she went out with you

But now I sit here
in all my sadness
Thinking there's just nothing. . .
nothing. . .
I can do

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  • 17 years ago

    by Kelsey

    Oh wow, this is a GREAT poem.
    It makes me kinda sad though, because I know what it's like to have a friendship ruined because of a different relationship.
    but great poem!
    5/5
    Oh, and I hope you two get things figured out soon. =]

  • 17 years ago

    by Sean Allen

    "Thinking theres just nothing. . . "
    there's needs an apostrophe.
    ~~~
    I thought that this poem was very sparse and concise, but I think that it lacks details and imagery. It is a bit better off than other sad poems in that there is a definite story behind it, but I don't think that you tell the story enough, and I don't think that you describe things in as much detail as you should. I can understand that one of this poem's strengths is its sparse prose, but I think that it'd improve with a bit of beefing up.

  • 17 years ago

    by Meggie33

    I liked that one, it was very good, you are very talented, you have a lot of skills...

    **meggie**

  • 17 years ago

    by Kimberly

    Hey I hope my advise helped you and I really liked this poem a lot. I hope you solved your problem with your friend. And I hope you spoke your mind. I wish you well and please keep writing such beautiful poetry. well cya later, Kimberly

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