Chair of Sorrow

Hey SiE, I really love this write..... gives a person something to think about. The only thing I see with it are the last 3 three lines....

Entertaining my thoughts,
Biding my time,
And dreaming of you.

Maybe say something like

Biding my time,
Entertaining thoughts,
Dreaming of you.

or

Entertaining thoughts,
Biding my time
Dreaming of you

Other than that, it's a perfect read. I truly enjoyed it.

"Biding my time,
And dreaming of you."

^^ the way that you ended it completely gives the poem a make over...it captivates me...the way you have conveyed your emotions is brilliant...i really cannot find anything to critique in this siE, it is really flawless. But I think that the third last line..."entertaining my thoughts", is a little long, and takes away the honor that the last two lines should recieve...only if you could use a few less syllables in that, i think it would be a little better...but i dont know...obviously, you write better than me lol. Take care sie, Dhaval

Kewl Beans

Lovely write, SiE, it really was deep and captivating... Dhaval

Are You Published? If You Aren't You Should Be, This Sounds Like Quality Literature, Its Not Like Other Poems I Read Daily, This One Has Poetential And Substance...I Enjoyed It 5/5 xoxo-Nikki-xoxo