Sunset In Motion

by Twisted Heart   May 18, 2006


Into the distance, I humbly stare
Trying to capture a glimpse of your eyes
But you flitter away with not even a care
And disappear in the celestial sky.
I hold fast to secrets that we once shared
As the brilliance of you starts to die
Now I sit in the afterglow that you cast
And grieve for the moments that didn\'t last.

The moon rises higher, It\'s God\'s sacred gift
For all Nature\'s creatures must at some time sleep
They all close their eyes and in slumber they slip
And grasp at the dreams that were meant to be.
I look to the sky and my soul starts to lift
For beautiful stars shine brightly on me
I gladly accept the night\'s gentle kiss
And bask in the embers of nocturnal bliss.

Ottava Rima is a poem where the stanzas consist of eight lines each. Each line has a ten -or- eleven syllable count. The rhyming scheme for Ottava Rima is as follows:

abababcc
dededeff
ghghghii

.. And so on for as many stanzas as you wish.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Nicely penned form with beautiful imagery. Great job!

  • 15 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    Comment #5:
    Oooh! Very cool! Very serene feel to this one. Great job!
    ~Midnight Sun

  • 15 years ago

    by ~yOu EnVy Me ~

    Thats cool how you wrote it 5/5
    great !

  • 15 years ago

    by BrokenMisery

    Beautiful language, you're writing is very well crafted! No critisim, I can't find anything wrong with it. Great description, very vivid and alive. An excellent piece, keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by shobhana kumar

    Wow! amazing! beautiful, vivid imagery. I especially like the first stanza where you have personified the sun.

    wonderful reading your work again.

    love and peace
    shobhana