The moon and the stars..

No wonder u got second place!
That was such a sweet poem!
Yet sad at the same time!! You have a talent of doing that dont you! lol

Jen

Comment #4

Awww, this is so cyuuute

I like this poem, it's sad and so sweet. I love these lines:

And placed a delicate kiss
On my once smiling lips

I also liked the title.

Good job! 5/5
Keep writing.

I really like this one. Under the stars and the moon,, How romentic!! It is really well written and keep writing like this!!!

It was good as far as descriptions but really I want to know how they are feeling. I can get a sense of sadness from this but it doesn't feel enough to make me feel as sorry for the boy as I do for the girl, which is not as much as I would have hoped. I can get a good image of her crying though which means the visuals aren't really what you should focuse on. They're good enough as is.