A perfect world

by The Angel of Secrets   May 20, 2006


This misconception of a perfect world,
Darkness within this perfect girl.
A disaster is what she really is,
The journey of life shouldn't be like this.
The path she has chosen was one of a kind,
Not exactly what her parents had in mind.
She was supposed to be perfect, supposed to be nice,
Now the pushed her so far, they had to pay the price.
She took her own way, the life she never had,
She never looked back, never felt bad.
She chose to live, chose to take a breath,
She chose to live her life, until her ending death.

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  • 17 years ago

    by PS

    Interesting. some of the couplets were uneven. but nice job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wow, that was very powerful and very good! i loved it :) it flowed well, and it sent across a good message! there was only one mistake that i could find ::

    Now the pushed her so far, they had to pay the prize.
    ^ in this line, "prize" is meant to be spelled "price" hehe..

    excellent poem! keep it up! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenna Balkin

    I remember reading this in a contest once :)
    I liked it then and I like it now! 5/5!

    Jen
    Comment#3

  • 17 years ago

    by Lisa

    I think you write this poem really well i think you made a mis sell on this one hehe.

    Now the pushed her so far, they had to pay the prize.

    Apart from that...good job.

  • 17 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Somehow this one seems to be ur story & all i could say is all the very best in which ever u lead ur life.

    beautifully expressed poem
    take care
    5/5

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