Escape...

by master of shadow   May 26, 2006


Needing to escape this place,
But deeply fearing the end
Constant thoughts of death and release,
So I turn to my only friend.
Though made of metal
And cold to the touch,
This small serrated edge
Has helped me through so much.

And now that there is no reason to remain
This sole friend shall help me leave,
Shall start the crimson river
Steal my life, so I will no more breath.
As the crimson river flows
And removes me from my life,
I know that I had no choice,
It was the only way to end all strife.

Though part of me regrets it
And wishes I could stay,
Thinks of all I now may miss,
But there was no other way.
The river is in a torrent now,
Rushing across the floor,
I take a final glance around the room,
Before using that forbidden door.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Joy

    Loved the metaphors. Def. a good touch. It ended rather ubruptly though, but maybe that's the point??

    Great job though!!

    joy*:.xx

  • 17 years ago

    by firexflys

    Wow this was amazing the flow was great and on point the meaning was deep keep up the good work i hope things get better 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by *~vixen~*

    "Though part of me regrets it
    And wishes I could stay,
    Thinks of all I now may miss,
    But there was no other way.
    The river is in a torrent now,
    Rushing across the floor,
    I take a final glance around the room,
    Before using that forbidden door."

    thats my favorite stanza, i dont think i have read a cutting poem worded like this, very good. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Wow that is a very strong and emotional poem. You had some great word usage and you described everything very well. The way that you ended it was very good and had a hint of regret in it. Great job on this! Definitely a 5/5**

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    Aw w.o.w That was really good. Buuut. In this line 'and removes from me my life' I think you meant to say 'And removes me from my life' Hm, I dunno. It just didn't sound right the way it was. Awesome job though. Loved it. 5/5

    `taleee xx

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