That night

by ~*~Morgan~*~   Jul 11, 2006


Our lips touch
so soft and sweet
rain pouring down
upon the windows sill
we know nothing
of our surroundings
its just me and you
becoming one
you slide you hands in places they don't belong
i quiver with every touch
I guide your shirt off your body
Together tonight we are one
your touch is like something surreal
your kiss, a fairy tale
you bring me down on the ground
our desires take complete control of our actions
passionately making love
together you and i becoming one....

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  • 17 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Wonderful poem. i loved it. keep up the good work.5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Aline

    Wow how passionate and sweet, wow, very nce 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awww.. this was very sweet.. it could also be considered a eplicit poem though.. the descriptions were good and quite beautiful.. the flow was a little off but it was fine.. nice job! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by loretta Taylor

    I liked this a lot. It is such a sweet picture in my mind. Tow people so in love. Great job 5/5 Loretta

  • 17 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Morgan --
    I didn`t want you to lose your 5.0 rating on this poem ;; so I was a little generous. I think your grammar definitely needs some work. Thats the first thing I look for in poetry, and its a key essential. Darling, please make sure that you are capitalizing your 'I'`s. It looks bad and unprofessional if you don`t. But other than that, you actually did a pretty good job. Not bad at all! So I gave it a 5/5. Keep it up.

    Much Love,
    Samantha Hollywood

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