Anger

by SilenceBreaksTheHeart   Jul 24, 2006


Trapped in a cage of burning rage
anger rips me apart.
I think destructive thoughts as my sympathy rots
no more will I have a heart.

I'm going insane as you shriek in pain
but madness is so sweet.
You scream and yell as I say farewell
your in for a deadly treat.

The pain I gave is what I crave
no mercy will you see.
I'll be alert and I'll make it hurt
that I guarantee.

Now close your eyes cause everyone dies
be quiet and succumb.
It'll hurt a bit but I won't quit
just wait for the pain to come.

***This poem seems incomplete in some way...I'm not sure if I should add something or remove it, but yeah. Comment and tell me what you think, I'd really appreciate it and I'll return the favor. Thanks

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  • 17 years ago

    by Todd

    Hey..this is a good poem with an awesome rhyme scheme. however it does need some more work explaining it... is there someone this anger is aimed at??? a certain person, group of people, yourself??? other than that it was still a great poem...it just left me feeling like the last page of the book was missing and i haven't figured out whats going on yet...great analogy i know.jk... oh yea and the whole 19.95 thing was just a stupid sign off line i use with many others.;P

    ~Now with Calcium C~
    Todd

  • 17 years ago

    by xxmichaelxx

    Ur poems relates to me just like MY poems to you. it's really kool how u rhyme it and stuff. really GREAT!

    Adrian ('',)

  • 17 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Silence --
    I definitely agree that this poem is incomplete. I gave it a 4/5 because the theme is somewhat vague ;; and there are a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes. The rhyming worked out well - but the flow really didn`t. Some lines ran too long, and some ran too short. I would consider adding more detail to this ;; I kept getting distracted while I was reading it. 4/5

    Love Much,
    Samantha Hollywood

  • 17 years ago

    by *Cosmic*Whispers*

    I Love it exactly the way it is, It's such a interesting rhyme scheme I dont't think I've actually read a poem like that in about 2 years!! I wouldn't change it it's very ecceftive as it is

    Great job
    Love
    Xx-me-xX

  • 17 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    It doesnt need tht much work..i lik it as it is..

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