If you..

by Nelle   Aug 16, 2006


I need you now like I needed you then
I will be with you until the end
I love you for you, and only you
You are the one that gets me through

Without you I am nothing
But with your love I am something
You took my hand that day I tried to die
You came with me and made me realize

As long as I have you here
I will always be sincere
If you ever leave me here to die
All I will be able to do is cry

( ok this is slop i know..my writing has turned to crap, so as for now this is my last one..I have lost my talent and don't know how to get it back..so honest opinions would be helpful. )

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  • 17 years ago

    by LostForever

    I love it! i can really relate to it

  • 17 years ago

    by -The-Undying-

    Without you I am nothing
    I wouldnt say taht but sometimes it feels like that. This wasn't your best work but keep it up!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    "I need you now like I needed you then"

    Wow, that sounded familiar. I think it was a Good Charlotte cover song from someone else. Eww I hate Good Charlotte. Haha, I hope you didn't take it from them. A really good poem. Yes, I know it was not one of your better poems, but it was a great try.

    PS. I think you have a wonderful smile, and you look beautiful :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awh, you can never lose your talent hun.. You simply feel like you are writing badly so you are not trying.. Okay, my suggestions on the poem are to try and not use "I" and "You" so much.. Try and use clever ways to avoid that and add more power to the other words.. Also, try and even out the lengths of the lines and stanza's so they are all about the same.. Add a few more details and it should be great! Keep it up hun, we'd miss you if you went! 5/5

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