The angels sing their sad, sad song
of the demise of this once beautiful love...
Love, of which has fallen to ashes at our feet.
The fragile wings you once gave me
when your toxic lips met mine...
I used to fly like the angels,
through the heavens of good and evil.
The golden halo that once sat atop my head
shatters into dust and vanishes, never to be seen again.
The delicately spun silk wings.. tattered, worn, and stained with my tears of sorrow, lay crumpled on the dirty floor...
Just like the butterfly wings that used to flutter
whenever your eyes met mine.
I used to be the angel of your dreams,
dreams of which will never come true.
Just one more kiss and I could die
in the deep despair of the shadows
of your heart.
Wow this poem was short but even still you managed to capture my interest and hold it right till the very end. I loved it, so powerful and thought provoking. I loved the metaphores and the beauty that you managed to keep along with the sence of sadness, thats very hard to do yet you did it with such professionlism.(Sp?) Amazing job. Well done.
Such a beautiful, powerful opening with each line getting better than the last.
Once again you did a fantastic job with the imagery.
The flow was spot on in this, and I enjoyed the ending, I thought it was intense and a perfect way to wrap up.
Wow this was amazing. i could feel the emotion coming off in waves.. Good job. like the other one i commented on maybe if you brake it up into stanzas it would be a bit more easier to read.
the flow and rhyme were great.. Keep up the wonderful work. 5/5