Bleeding Mascara

I liked this one, you have a way with your words that makes the reader really feel the emotions.
You are very talented, dont let anyone tell you otherwise.
keep writing

Much love, Tara-Kay

Tammy,

I do not think I would be very good in commenting on this poem but sinc eyou asked me particulary to comment on this title, I will try. I think other women can help you better how to express better emotional upheavel that you want this particular title to express.

Nice message you have in the poem, but I felt that the message is too direct especially since it is such a touchy emotional reality. Being subtle would have made the theme much stronger and would have interested the user more.

You have got a nice concept to build upon and you know the situation quite well. Just arrange your thoughts better before you begin writing. Do not begin writing, hoping words to flow. And as I always say use Punctuation.

The line

Honesty can't be bought anymore
is ver odd... I did not catch what you want to say here... Are you sad that honesty can't be bought?? It spoils the thought process and flow. Think of a different line there.

Nice ending for a sad poe, please use Punctuation. (I know that I am repeating myself.)

Title is kind of relative........ um. but..let me see....

Ah; it gives an impression that the masacara is absorbing hurt and paying the price... that is not the concept of your poem... right?? Change the adjective for the mascara.

This is an excelllent description of what most females in the world face today. We let magazines and tv stars choose who we want to be. I really loved the whole concept of this poem and I really think that this is a good example of how naive we can be. 5/5
Excellent job!

Letty

Wow. I loved how you described make-up as being to cover up a face to hide from people. I totally know where you're coming from. Keep that chin up. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Wow, awesome poem Tammy. My favorite part (which i think was really powerful) was
"Pick ups and put me downs
Are all these worthless make-ups
Put on a face to hide
My lack of confidence"

Great job 5/5