The rising of the sun

by Letty   Sep 25, 2006


Every morning that I'm able
to open my eyes,
I am grateful for the
blessing of meeting the sunrise.

I prepare myself mentally for the
beautiful picture that I know it'll
paint. It peaks from beyond the
horizon as its canvas awaits.

It begins by drawing the perfect
sketch of a Blue Jay perched upon
my ledge. It then joins in
with the melody of the birds
that float above my head.

Once it sets its brush into motion
the rest of nature joins in. They
all create their own tempo to the
song the birds sing.

As the song nears its end the sun
turns and looks my way. It smiles
in its own style with its glorious rays.

I know then that I have permission
to let my day began.
I wave sweetly at the sun
and say thank you my friend.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Ahh i made a mistake in my suggestion-It peaks from beyond the horizon,
    as its canvas*another word here maybe?* awaits.

    =] still a 5 tho. =]

  • 17 years ago

    by Lauren Waszkiewicz

    Ok i like the poem, but i dont like the rhythm youve used for it. -with the random lines beginning within oneanother. (does that even make sense?) ex-I prepare myself mentally for the
    beautiful picture that I know it'll
    paint. It peaks from beyond the
    horizon as its canvas awaits.
    the breaks dont match.. i think itd make the whole poem sound and flow better if you broke it up differently maybe as-
    I prepare myself mentally,
    for the beautiful picture
    that I know it'll paint.
    It peaks from beyond the
    horizon, as its canvas awaits.

    just a suggestion because if the line ends abruptly in the midst of a thouhgt or actual line, it makes it choppy nad confusing, this style worked int he other poem, but i didnt feel it here.

    *another thing- i hate when people use and,.,. -and say thank you my friend.. try 'saying' instead, it sounds better.

    But otherwise a great poem its like the sequal to your other poem., i loved reading them one after another. =]

    x.x:Lauren

  • 17 years ago

    by blueknight

    WOah I cant say anything to this one Grealy Beautifully and awesomely written Very nice job

    Geneross

  • 17 years ago

    by Arsalan D

    Awesome, Awesome, Awesome This poem has a great flow with beautiful meaning. Great job once again.

    Arsalan D.

  • 17 years ago

    by John (Mr. Whuppy)

    "Every morning that I'm able
    to open my eyes,
    I am grateful for the
    blessing of meeting the sunrise."

    What a way to start the day

    Love it

    You get better with each poem

    John
    5/5