The End of the World

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Oct 19, 2006


I tried a different rhyme scheme, I guess you could say..
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The heavens wither at the touch of my hand,
Gods cry out, falling to my every command.
Thunderous applauds rupture the land,
Gods fall, crying to my command.

Twenty-thousand armies dance across the soil,
Over a puzzling decision they must toil.
Protecting their Gods\' dashing royal;
Wonderous decisions they must toil.

Hitting the ground in rumorus praise,
Laughing about in mysterious ways.
Glancing around for these broken days,
For about mysterious laughs of simple ways.

One by one, deathly armies gladly take,
What was never theirs in this ending wake.
Yet, still they steal for their Gods\' sake,
Never was it theirs in this ending wake.

The world crumbles, piece by piece,
The never ending love of Heaven cease.
The Gods of armies stand by a crease,
Of Heavens\' end, the love will cease.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    I realy injoyed the read. great job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Synh

    Loved it except in the last stanze, where you used 'cease' twice. Excellent write, though. I really enjoyed reading it.

  • 17 years ago

    by twisted reality

    ^_^ I liked this one a lot. It gave me a real meaning of what's happening in our world, and we're not trying to stop it.

    I liked the new scheme you've used. Although I didn't like the 2nd and 4th line being the same at first, I slowly got used to it.

    The flow was stable, and the structure was well done. No fixes with the rhymes were needed either. They were original, and so not cliche lol. Well done. =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 17 years ago

    by ALEX

    I am definitely in love with the rhyme scheme. that's so creative. it all rhymes but the second and last sentences' last words are the same! that's so cool!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Thoughtless Consideration

    Amazing.
    very interesting and marvelous rhyming