No Direction

by Sweet lig   Oct 23, 2006


I wanna run away from this place
I wanna run somewhere space
Where no one will find me
Where my angel can guide me

I'm so lost
I'm so confused
My body feeling so weak
My heart beating so slow

Don't know where to start,
Don't know where to go,
There's no signs for me to follow
There's no sounds for me to hear

Where should I start?
Where should I go?
Should I start to the right? or;
Should I go to the left?

Whom I'm going to be?
Whom I'm going to trust?
There's no one could tell me
There's no one could help me

Sometimes I feel I have no direction
Sometimes I feel I'm fallen apart
Confused for undecided thoughts
Confused for unsolved problems

Everytime I prayed,
Everytime I asked for signs,
A signs can guide me
A signs that i can follow

I believe this is only a challenge
That GOD's given on me
A challenge to make me strong,
A challenge to face my fears!

***i wrote this poem one month ago, actually I'm not too sure and i cant decide to submit here in my poems... i didnt know if this is good but only i think, i write this what comes in my mind when i feel so really confused..but now i think this is the time to publish it here. well i know this poem wasnt good enough so whatever u gonna think i will appreciate it.. thanks and god bless!***

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    This poem is deferent of your others. Second stanza is my favorite. You described emotions superbly. Flow is excellent. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    In the second to last stanza it should be "sign" not "signs", I think. This although there wasn't a rhyme scheme, it was beautiful. Amaing flow! 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Beautifully written and very positive in the end. I'm not a believer, but I understand the emotions that you portrayed in this piece.
    Keep up!

  • 16 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    I wanna run somewhere space
    [[...somehere {in} space...]]
    A signs can guide me
    A signs that i can follow
    [[This is redundant. "A" means one thing and you have "signs" as pluaral, which means more than one. Take out "a" or the "s" in "signs".]]

    But, I liked it. The ending was very suffice for the type of poem. I almost told you to put it in sad, until I got to the end.
    Not too bad at all.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I liked this one, particularly the meaning behind it.
    Again though, some of the grammar mistakes threw me off.
    Keep working on that and it will hold much more power for the reader.

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