Fate

by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere   Nov 2, 2006


Let my death be a fate
That blinks in your eyes
Time ticks
Seconds past
Minutes seem to be gone cold
As the rest of my body
Eyes stopped blinking
The prayers that caress my lips
Has shivered down to stillness
My hands that shook uncontrollably
Are now stiff
I can no longer feel the cold ground
Beneath my body
Let the death of me
Have tears well up in your eyes
I want to see if you cry or not
If you really loved me or not
I just want to see
If you really meant what you said,
"I hate you"
Had broken me
Now look where you put me
Let my death be a fate
That blinks in your eyes
Now let my fate be yours

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  • 17 years ago

    by Landi Cordier

    This might sound a little sick, but i'm listing my club playlist, and this actually goes pretty well with the remix of one of the songs, mabey u know it - imagine you and me, and me and you, and all the things we used to be, it goes something like that, but the remix fits perfectly! i now its sad, but its a terrific song!

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I liked this, particuarly the imagery.
    I found it very moving.
    Beautiful.

  • 17 years ago

    by melly xx

    Just a tip, you used blink three times, and i think you could improve your poem by using a better word like nictitate, or something else. =)
    anyways, well written poem, a little forced, but other wise good.
    my favorite line was: "The prayers that caress my lips" this line is SO powerful, and i ♥ it so much!!
    nice one yo 5;5

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Wow.. that last line really blew me away. The whole poem was very descriptive and filled with so much emotion. The flow and rhtyh was very good and it held up very well. I just loved all of it. Great job on this! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    This was a good poem..it was pretty deep and had a strong point in it. I think it was very well written:), nice flow and good poem over all. 5/5

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