Omen Of Death

by Jessica   Nov 3, 2006


Delicate arms crossed across a chest
Porcelain makeup carefully applied
Dead eyes shut in the eternal darkness
But her breathing spirit does reside..

Laid comfortably against soft cushions
Surrounded by locked wood on all sides
Suddenly awakening; frozen with fear
Panic slowly taking over her insides..

Scratching furiously at her prison cell
Desperately trying to escape or break free
Trapped within a coffin; an omen of death
Alone in the dark she makes her silent plea..

Fear slowly strangling her stunned heart
Oxygen not finding its way to her brain
Crimson eyes emerging from the shadows
Lack of air taking over, making her insane..

Skin emitting its fluids, makeup smudging
Eyes losing focus, a girl fighting for her life
Urgently kicking at the solid wood in tears
Starting to lose hope, a body in torturing strife..

Wood piercingly splintering; dirt crashing in
Mouth filled instantly, eyes painfully burn
Climbing with terror what seems like miles
Reaching the surface, to earth she does return..

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  • 17 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    I didn't comment on all of them. If you want me to comment, just tell me. This poem seems to be talking about being buried alive. Is that right?

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    WOW.
    Words can not express how I feel about this poem.
    In short, I absolutely loved it.
    I thought everything about it, the wording, the flow, the rhyme scheme, the imagery was perfect.
    Very well done.

  • 17 years ago

    by melly xx

    I like your first line, it was a great attention catcher! ;-)
    your words are very...let's just say "well put" they make sense even though it seems confusing, i like that it's kind of tricky.
    great job, 5;5

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Well, first off, I really loved the title of this poem! It really draws the reader in without even reading anything yet. The descriptions were amazing. They really created a picture for me and I felt like I was watching it happen and I actually got shivers down my spine from it. The ending was a little confusing for me at first because I thought she was dying but I reread the last stanza a few times and then it created a deeper meaning for me. Which was great. You have a talent Darling.

    5/5

    -Jenna.

  • 17 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wow, that was really good. I loved it. The flow and the Rhyme scheme, was really good. And the words you used and the way you used them was awesome. I am not really into dark poems, but yours was written very good. Keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe