My HeaVEns ANGEL wiLL bE miSSeD..

by Moon Princess   Nov 15, 2006


Her feet wander along the broken path.
Blood trickles on the pebbles with each step.
Depression has closed up her mind.
So many salty tears has she wept.

Her feet now take her to a shimmering lake.
It expands so far and wide.
Slowly with each painful thought.
She decides where she'll hide.

Her feet saunter into the green-blue water.
She takes one, final last breath.
The water cascades up her broken body.
She welcomes this wanted death.

Her feet squish on the lakes ocean floor.
Deeper and deeper they take her soul.
This water doesn't suffocate her as much as her life.
It seems to fill that black void.

Her feet can't her hold her s body down.
They relax, sleep, and drift.
Open eyes with a peaceful smile.
A blue colour stains her lips.

Her feet swirl in the watery blood.
That had spilled out from her slit wrist.
But low and behold she's never felt more alive.
My heaven's angel will be missed...

+.+ Well, this was a different writing experience for me. I don't usually describe my poems so deeply, I always put a twist at the end tho. HeHe. Plz comment. I liked this one, but it's....different from the usual. +.+

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  • 17 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    Nice job. The descriptions were excellent. There was beauty within the lines. It held a sad undertone cut through with a sense of...I don't know...peace if that's the word. Cool write.
    ~Faith-less

  • 17 years ago

    by Neha

    Beautifully written..
    and no I am not claiming it as my own..since there are quotation marks before and after the quote..
    =)
    anyways..5/5
    great work..
    and keep writing=)
    *

  • 17 years ago

    by Raychil

    This poem was amazing, and the ending was trully magnificent, it was perfect. So sad and deep, yet still these very thoughts creep into many people's minds. Wonderful poem. Beautiful.

  • 17 years ago

    by Gem

    "Her feet swirl in the watery blood.
    That had spilled out from her slit wrist.
    But low and behold she's never felt more alive.
    My heaven's angel will be missed..."

    The ending was so bittersweet and so beautiful.
    Your wording was great, they seemed to pain a picture of what was happening.
    You have a gift =)
    5/5
    *Gem*