Say It With Bullets

by Darien   Nov 16, 2006


Say It With Bullets

I held this gun like I held your hand
A warm feeling on the cold trigger
Pressed against my temple waiting
But I won't die if it's you I'm hating

Your mouth is the perfect bullseye
Speak slowly with no hesitations
Only one word can decide your fate
So please remember to enunciate

All the troubles you put me through
You don't deserve a second chance
Everything you ever said was a lie
Your last word should be goodbye

Admit you cheated and I won't shoot
Don't cover up with lame excuses
You never apologized for hurting me
All you have to do is say you're sorry

One word can save your pathetic life
One shot can end it all in an instant
A long overdue showdown ends today
So which word will you choose to say?

*This title was inspired by Richard P. Powell's novel,
"Say It With Bullets"*

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  • 16 years ago

    by Diabolic Atrocity

    You know, I'm not really sure what it is about this poem, I can't really put my finger on it, but I love it. And I love how you ended it, it really gave it that extra, I guess drama is the word I'm looking for. But anyways, great poem, and love all your work. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I LOVED it.
    This is one of my favourite's of your's.
    I liked how you got the idea from a novel as well.

  • 17 years ago

    by Mousie

    Good poem, i didn't like the rhyme scheme though. but i did like the poem, nice job

  • 17 years ago

    by Letty

    Wow!!! You really do have a way with words. This is a very, very, wonderful poem. I was pulled into it from the begining and held captive until the end. My favorite stanza was the last one:

    One word can save your pathetic life
    One shot can end it all in an instant
    A long overdue showdown ends today
    So which word will you choose to say?

    I really loved it . I didn't see anything that I would suggest you change. Keep up the great work. 5/5

    Best wishes
    Letty

  • 17 years ago

    by Idiosyncratic

    The title works very well with this poem. And I LOVE the poem. Again, the creativity can be clearly seen. A few of the rhymes seem forced, but they still seem to work. The flow is very good, and the meaning is clear. 5/5.

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