Good poem, I know there is a language barrier between us, and your have your own dialect. It made sense to me, because I have a lot of Filipino friends and I know how they speak. Lol, nice work.

I really liked this. even though it was short, I could feel a lot of emotion behind it. The only think though, I think that you meant to say "heart is broken in two too many times" instead of "Heart is broken into many times,"

other than that, this was lovely.

Great poem, make the 3rd line (Heart has been broken so many times), but its still very good!!!

Great start, It was a bit short, so I thought I should be a bit longer.

The first line, "I may look seem so happy," Should be, "I may look or seem so happy,"

And the last line, "And i feel i can no longer to live anymore..." Should be, "And i feel i can no longer live anymore..."

Other than that I thought the flow was great. Keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Really short, but i liked it,

I liked this poem i found it short but it held enough information throughout it to keep me interested and show what you were portraying throughout this. The flow was nicely done. Great read. ~mel

Short and to the point. Only problem with this poem is the first line. You should chose either look, or seem, not both in this case. It leaves the flow appering, a bit rocky. Other than that well written. 4/5

Id have liked the poem to go on but it soped leaving me in the mood of the poem, well done, nicely executed

I don't know why, maybe it's that I like you, but I actually kind of liked this overly cliche poem. Not sure.

But, it was cliche and I hate cliche and it just didn't do anything for me..I'm sorry.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

Great piece! It is short but very powerful. I like the topic and you wrote this poem excellently. I like every line in this poem, it really deserves 5/5

I CAN RELATE TO IT. I like the form of this poem, it is short but powerful. It is also deep and emotional.

This is a short but effective poem, it definately expresses your feeling well
5/5 well done
xx

I know this feeling so well. There are times in which I see my life empty and meaningless. The poem is short but gives a strong message. Nice work 5/5

I like this, it's short and simple, and it still holds a lot of emotion. I loved it!

.:CiNdY:.

I know how that feels. although there are a few words that are unneeded.
this is what your poem looks like

"I may look seem so happy,
But I'm crying inside
Heart is broken so many times,
Tears streaming from my swollen eyes
There are times i think to give up,
And i feel i can no longer to live anymore..."

it should be, to correct your grammar mistakes
"I may seem so happy,
But I'm crying inside
My heart has been broken so many times,
Tears streaming from my swollen eyes
There are times i think to give up,
And i feel i can no longer live anymore..."

it sounds and looks way better like that. just my thoughts. but i totally understand the concept of the poem.
5/5