Crimson Dagger

by Rona   Jan 3, 2007


I have never loved like this before,
My heart has never been broken either.
I sit here uncertain of what's left,
While the flowers you sent me wither.

Each petal that falls on the ground,
Reminds me of this sorrow I feel.
No happy moments stay true,
Only the painful memories are real.

Once more I am alone in this room,
Waiting for you to call.
I sit here like a fool when I know
Everything is about to fall.

Here I am tonight,
With this dagger in my hand.
Here I am alone,
My hate is taking command.

I cannot do anything,
The dagger in my hand is calling.
Waiting for the last minute,
I know everthing will start falling.

I am slowly fading away,
While I carve my pain into my heart,
My mind was filled with thoughts of you,
You knew it would end like this right from the start.

I took the dagger, filled it with crimson lust.
There is nothing more you can do,
Even if you begged me to stay,
Even if you said I love you.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I knew this would be a great poem, the title really caight my attention.
    your words are so powerful, i was gripped to every line, a very sad and heartfelt poem.
    you have talent.
    keep writing
    love Tara-Kay

  • 18 years ago

    by twisted reality

    AHH! Sorry I took so long to get this one done. -.- Got caught up with school and stuff. But ere it is...

    Well I didn't think it was as well done as your others. It could be improved. Starting off, I think the flow was off in many places. If a poem doesn't have flow when it's meant to, it won't make sense as a poem. Try re-reading this and see if you can see what I'm seeing.

    Also, the rhymes were easy and way too cliche to use for a topic so deep. The rhymes and vocabulary could've gone deeper into the topic and it would do well. It might take up more room, but it would be improved.

    But overall, the poem wasn't bad. There was a lot of emotion behind the topic, and the title just sums it all up together. I love that in a poem. Keep it up. =) 4/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 18 years ago

    by ForeverYoung

    Wow, gerat poem.
    I like the way the title is fitted into the poem, your rhyming is great keep it up!
    Steph

  • 18 years ago

    by *Isolde*

    This poem wasnt that bad 4/5 keep it up...Dont worry your still like my favorite writers though...I just love the way you think and write your poems..

  • 18 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Excellent work. You definitely have immense talent. Keep it up.

    *Adding to favourites.

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