Slit A Wrist

I can relate to this piece. I love the way it rhymes, it seems to suit the poem.. The message is clear and simply written.

Well. I was a bit disappointed it didn't turn out to be all darkish and gloomy, but it turned out to be quite nice. I especially like the first two stanzas.

"Slit a wrist
Watch it bleed
It's all you want
And all you need"
Those last two lines made me pause. I've seen it often, but it's one of those things that always hit hard. At some points, it's kinda true for everyone, no?

"You deeply want
To end your life"
I think this was the only thing in the poem that I didn't like. It's too... blatantly put?

"Slit a wrist
Not too deep"
That came as a very unexpected surprise, and a pleasant one, too. It holds hope, but also a sort of neutrality that is kind of cold, but also comforting.

A job well done.

I love this poem keep up the great work

OK, so i think this is officially your best poem, i don't really know how you wrote such a great peice and i feel a bit jelouse. you know now how i feel about it, i love it... just thought I'd say that! :]
ok so i kinda coppied your words but so what they really describe how i fell about it.
lovely read:~)Sam

Omg
this is my Fav