Mournful Day

by Hatori   Feb 17, 2007


I remember,
That mournful day,
When I was dressed in black,
And tears were flowing from my eyes.

You left me,
In this horrid world,
But perhaps you are in a better place,
That's all that I can pray.

These stones around me,
Scare me so much,
I could be under one,
But somehow I'm not.

I want to be with you,
So very much,
My heart burns in despair,
And all I can do,
Is think of you.
Your voice,
Your warmth,
Your kindness and heart.

Please don't fear,
For I am near,
I want to be with you,
Even if it means,
My own demise.

With that,
I was gone,
I never saw you again,
Not even after my slow, painful passing.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Lisa

    Wow..
    amazing write,caught the wrods outta my mouth on paper.
    keep it up!
    -Lisa

  • 16 years ago

    by RemainingSilent

    I really liked this piece. The stanzas and the words and everything fit perfectly. Just one little thing,
    "flowing from my face"
    there could be a better discribing phrase there, something that adds more feeling to the reader like
    "And tears streamed down my face"
    or
    "And mascara(and or)eyeliner ran down my face"
    something like that. i think that stanza has more potential then what its been givin right now.
    (*I didn't mean for that second suggestion to sound like my poem lol i just like the image of running eyeliner*)

    I loved it...I can relate a lot :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Vincent Thornsberry

    Pretty good. it didnt connect with me like other poems do but it was good none the less

  • 17 years ago

    by Broken Inside He only wants to hurt me

    Wow this is a powerful poem that seaks to everyone. great work, this poem was very inspiring.5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Yuna

    *cries*. This one was a tear-jerker. It brought memories and thoughts to my mind. Thank-you for writing!

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