When i think i fall,
When i fall i fall so far,
When i think i've fallen all i can i fall some more,
and i never really know when its going to stop,
can i stop it?
i dont know,
it would be easy to say its out of my control,
but is it?
can i stop myself being sad?
can i stop those pills hitting my tongue?
can i stop my heart breaking?
can i stop hurting myself?
but far more importantly
can i stop hurting you?
I don't like the ending. I think that you could wrote this poem more better. It is interesting but atmosphere could be stronger. Still I like the topic and it is very unique piece, that deserves 5/5( also you have very original style of writing)