Just Walk Away

Oh no...the last line needs to be the second one in the third paragraph.. ha ha ...sorry!!

Hi dear Laura....

here's your critique....its\'s as much as i can find....im digging deep, yet! ha ha

"in a desperate time of need"
ok, i think that this mustve happened once, where you needed your friend and he/she wasnt there.... because it would put more emphasis on that particular event when you needed her...the time of need would be highlighted..

also in the first stanza third line...
i think you should add an "i"... i appreciate and understand that it'll hurt the flow....but i think its confusing for the reader to know if its you or her who doesnt feel that feeling...

Great write otherwise....the third stanza was my absolute favorite :D

Take care Lawia!
Dhaval

so i think replacing the 'a' with 'the' would be better, because

Good poem, sorry for the misfortune

Great poem

You've come a long way with your writing my sweet, wonderful, simply wonderful. A powerful piece!