by xo kisses xo Mar 13, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
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**hey everyone...i know that this is long but its really good. please comment and i will comment you back! sry if the ending isn't really good...i have to go to bed so i will fix it tomorrow after school** |
by MyMuse
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You know this poem brought tears to my eys!!! it was truly amazing!!! IT WASNT TOO LONG!!! It was like a short story from one of those books with many stories in it. please dont EVER stop...you are amazing, you make it sound so simple =]!! it sounds like a poem i wrote a while back hmm we have the same ideas ahaha...but AWESOME JOB!!!! |
by BECLiKEW0AHH
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Aw. Thats so sad. |
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This was a sweet poem. Pretty sad and the emotion was there, which I liked. What I don't like, however, is that you use practically no punctuation. Your readers won't know when to stop if you don't use punctuation. You also didn't capitalise where you should have, and you should use apostrophes when needed (e.g. when writing she's instead of "shes".) |
by ThatPerson
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Umm,Hun-The poem might have been kinda long,but it was worth reading-REALLY,REALLY GOOD ;) 5/5 -Ria |
by Bloodstained
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Wow, that was amazing. all the emotion put into it made it even better. |