Intoxicating sister

by Kaila   Mar 15, 2007


You make me want to,
rip you to shreds!
It's because of you,
I have to take my Meds.

You make me,
scream with frustration!
I feel like you have me under,
some kind of intoxication.

Your eyes,
they burn into me with every glare.
That little smirk,
makes me want to rip out my hair.

Your whiny voice,
makes my ears want to bleed.
I hate how all your about,
is greed...

You want to be better then me,
so bad.
You were the worst mistake,
your parents could've ever had.

Because of you,
I am depressed.
Because of you,
my feelings are suppressed.

This feeling for you,
will never stop.
Until my body,
finally drops.

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  • 14 years ago

    by VeinsofHate

    You want to be better then me,
    so bad.
    You were the worst mistake,
    your parents could've ever had.

    Best lines ever. I can just feel and even hear anger in this piece. WOW!!! Very very good

  • 16 years ago

    by Patience

    Wow, the emotions are just pouring out of this piece. Very intense. I can not say that I can relate to this poem because my sister and I are very close but over all this was a great piece.

    Love the passion, keep up the great work ma.

    Cicely

  • 16 years ago

    by XxAllia RaynexX

    It was so full of anger...I loved it!!! Very powerful. You have a way with words.

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  • 16 years ago

    by SmileeItsBritt

    I really like the meaning behind this...like the word choic e of intoxication! Great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Good write as always, you have a way with words. Great Job.

    This line, "I hate how all your about," should be, "I hate how all you're about," you used the wrong "your" it should be "you're" which means "you are" just a minor mistake.

    In this Stanza,

    "You want to be better then me,
    so bad.
    You were the worst mistake,
    your parents could've ever had."

    I felt that the second line was too short compared to the others. Perhaps try making it a little longer, so that the flow doesn't ubrupty stop.

    Other than that this was a wonderful write, with great expression through out. Good job.

    Peace, Joe

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