Will You Be Around?

"Gathered by eyes and lips
Feeling your hands on my hips
But if I let you live that enjoyable bliss
Will you still be around in the morning? "

Amazing last stanza. Really really poignant
I think every girl who spends the night with someone is wondering those words.
Excellent structure and rhyming
5/5
*Gem*

Hey that poem really held a lot of messages and i thought it was great!

"But if I get stuck in a dream of lies
Will you be around to wake?"

i thought just those 2 lines together were amazing.. and the end verse was great, the last line was such a powerful way to end this poem.
I loved it <B
5/5
:D

~BRiDDY~

OoOoO nice descriptive words girl!!! you used great imagery and everything and the end was just the icing on the cake nice job!

I think this poem captures the essence that were all hopeing that our one special person is really going to be there for us and really going to take care of us back when were willing to give them our all. 5/5 =) definately a good read!

Wow
I am almost speechless
u have mowed me over
with your words this poem is excellent
so good I can't even pick a favorite line