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by .K.i.T.t.Y.   Mar 22, 2007


Heavy sighs fill my heart
In every scene of Hell,
Demons arise from Death,
Drenching me of Life,
Eventually I'll fade to dust,
Never to breathe again.

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  • 12 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Hmm.
    I like it, but not the last line. Too cliche.
    However, the rest was beautifully put together and well said. (And that's saying a lot from me, because I normally dislike Acrostics.)
    So, save for the last line (which really should be the best line) I loved it.

    Nice portraying of emotions.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

  • 13 years ago

    by Melpomene

    One word can describe this and its beautiful. I really don't know what to say about this piece. I found it to be breathe taking. Really amazing to read as i'm sure it was to write. You are talented keep on writing.~mel

  • 13 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Beautiful thing about acrostic poetry is that it can be short, and still so powerful.
    You can restrict yourself so the content is just what the poem needs, instead of trying to make the poem longer.
    The structure always works out well.

    I loved this poem, dear.
    It was powerful. Its dark. And takes a few reads to really understand.
    Maybe I took it my own way, not how you had intended. But that made it great.

    It wasn't obvious. Made you think.
    And still held a flow.

    Good work =]

  • 13 years ago

    by Kaila

    I loved this poem! it was very wonderfully written the grammer i just used was incorrect but oh well haha this poem was amazing ncie job

  • 13 years ago

    by sweetiepie18

    Pretty good